Monday, September 5, 2011

Pearly Whites--Campaign Challenge 1

Hooray, the first Campaign challenge! Today's task was to create a quick post of 200 words which began with the words "The door swung open." Additional challenges were to use exactly 200 words, which I did, and to end with the words "The door swung shut." Which...I almost did.

So... here's my post, and now it's back to the grindstone for me...






Pearly Whites

The door swung open to the park’s Children Center. Along the right wall there stretched a encased habitat of forearm-sized baby alligators. They chirped at Erika as she wandered in, fluorescent lights shining eerily down upon work tables strewn with broken crayons and tipped-over juice boxes. But no children.

“Hello?” Silly really, since the room was obviously empty, save for her. And the chirping alligators. Who knew alligators chirped?

Erika pulled out her phone. Leanne being on time for their nature walk was unlikely, considering her little Janice was still a toddler, but she always called if she was going to be late. Nope; no missed messages. Erika began to pace the the room, running her fingers over the displays, all happily labelled for the children, neon yellow smiley faces dotting their surfaces.

It seemed odd for it to be so quiet here; childless. She scanned the room carefully. Chairs were tipped over. Papers, ripped. Then she heard it—a sound that was certainly not a chirp. Eika turned. A mama alligator brandished its teeth at her. In its mouth there shined a single pearl, from the necklace Leanne always wore. As the chomping began, the door finally swung shut.

 

18 comments:

  1. OMG what happened to the kiddies ? Is it what I think it is ... ? C-R-E-E-P-Y Jes !
    Check mine out at no.#59 on the list !

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  2. Wow! This is a totally new take. It's great to read something that no one else has thought of yet. ~ Nadja

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  3. So the mama alligator's don't chirp? Creepy!

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  4. Yes, what you think happened, happened Mish. LOL.

    You mean nobody else wrote about alligators with a penchant for children and mommies wearing pearl necklaces? Crazy; it's such an obvious story line....he he he.

    The sound they make is more like half-cluck, half-chirp; it's a distress call to mamma. Lol. I was going for creepy, so that's good.

    Will pop over and read everyone's shortly!

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  5. This was no chirpy tale! Creepy as! Great reveal! But horrifying all the same. Denise

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  6. That's funny. I like that there's just the pearl. mine is #72

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  7. Thanks! I'm popping over right now..

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  8. Yikes! I didn't expect that ending. Good job - you totally surprised me :-)

    Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my entry. I'm #76.

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  9. Ha! Right, Jen...amazing that no one else thought to write on alligators and pearls! Too funny.

    Thanks for stopping by my page. As for your question... I don't know if I'll write romance in another challenge or not. I do tend to gravitate toward romance - and see things in a romantic light, but I guess you never know how the challenge words will inspire. Great to chat back and forth - Hope to see you again. ~ Nadja

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  10. Hi Jen, Fellow campaigner here. Visiting because your short was retweeted sometime agao. Great job!!!

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  11. Thanks Angela! I keep seeing things I want to change now, but I'm not sure I'm technically "allowed," lol.

    You're right Nadja, it's hard to know exactly where the story will end up, no matter how hard we try. Glad to know that's not just me...!

    Wow; thanks Writing Well! I feel so high tech now. Glad you liked it; will go visit you shortly.

    P.S. Call me Jes, short for Jessica!!

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  12. Yikes! You had me gripping my seat. Good job!

    Stobby

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  13. Mmmm kiddies with juice boxes and mommies with pearls, nom nom nom. Just kidding. LOL

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  14. Hehehe. I mean, that's terrible. This reminds me of a story I have to share. When my son was in kindergarten, we had an album by the Arrogant Worms, a funny Canadian band. On the album is a song called "Rippy the Gator." He sang it at school and we got called into a parent-teacher conference :D

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  15. I might have to go look up that song. The title alone has me sold!

    What an awkward conference, lol. LOL.

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  16. Oh that was so creepy..alligators are up there with spiders...oh yeah...I wrote about spiders.
    Where are the kiddies??

    http://www.doreenmcgettigan.com

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  17. Spiders, yes, lol. And the kiddies are...err...digesting. LOL.

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